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Post by Soulcatcher on May 26, 2008 0:29:49 GMT -5
So, I decided I'm gonna finally give another try at this forum. I've been writing lyrics again and I feel like I've finlly improved after all this time. But I need whoever replies to this to be 100 percent honest. If you hate it completely, I want to hear you say it and why you don't like it. I won't mind at all. Promise, but anyways, this one is called "Soundwave" a song I wrote it a little while ago.
"Soundwave"
Set the tone and let the floodgates give way over crackling speakers and through skeptic ears You worry me I don't know what to think
It's never so simple making excuses excuses plenty but none of it matters I have to let it out pour my heart out
Everyday thought proves weak brittle to its meaning try harder lay on the pressure of something never to be forced something i strived to have
It's never so simple making excuses excuses plenty but none of it matters I have to let it out Pour my heart out
Make room for me inside the glory of it all and create art out of random bursts.
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Post by Ape on Jun 22, 2008 13:57:09 GMT -5
I need whoever replies to this to be 100 percent honest. If you hate it completely, I want to hear you say it and why you don't like it. I won't mind at all. I have no idea how to go about judging non-rhyming poems, and it's hard to judge songs by the lyrics unless you hear them sung. I'm mostly just posting to say that you unfortunatly won't get a whole lot of feedback around here any more. Nobody writes regularly enough to visit often. *shrug*
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